Sunday, May 17, 2020

Golden Shovel Poems

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Try out a “Golden Shovel” poem using a phrase or sentence from The Great Gatsby. For instructions, see this document and view this screencast. Share your work (n.b., you have until the end of the week to post, so don’t worry if you can’t get this done for Monday).

Keep up the great work on your "Golden Shovel" poems! I've enjoyed reading them and am struck by how uncanny it is that these phrases and sentences of Fitzgerald's have pushed you to generate poems that obliquely or directly address characters, ideas, and symbols in the novel.  

45 comments:

  1. Nick of Time
    after Fitzgerald

    Only in the early morning do
    birdsongs alarm you
    from dreams that are always
    just past remembering. You watch

    for their blurred edges, for
    their maze-like rooms in the
    waking minutes that hand you into the longest
    hours of the lightest day
    yet. Outside the window, in
    newly green birch leaves, the
    breeze traces paths for the year.

    The branches lift and
    sink, sway, shiver, shake and then
    still. How can you miss
    something without ever having known it?

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  2. sometimes life is so
    unexpected that we
    decide to blame ourselves and beat
    ourselves up over things on
    which we had no control, like boats
    that go against
    the
    current

    "“So we beat on, boats against the current..." (Fitzgerald)

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    1. Thank you for getting us started, Jules! Nicely done. Excellent choice from those famous closing lines.

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  3. “Reserving judgements is a matter of infinite hope.” (Fitzgerald)
    He will keep reserving
    land as he grows, letting judgements
    leave his fingertips is
    the best way to move on, a
    glimpse of prejudice has no matter
    in his world, the beauty of
    his mind is infinite.
    Watch as wishes for the rest of us to give it hope.

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  4. "I’ve been everywhere and seen everything and done everything"- Fitzgerald

    She said to me I’ve
    Done everything I’ve wanted and have been
    Trying my hardest to go everywhere
    I’ve wanted to, and
    I’ve failed because I’ve seen
    The most important parts of life but I still feel that everything
    Is unclear, and
    Its hard to fulfill what I want and to be done
    When I have to try and tell myself that nothing is everything

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  5. “Breathing dreams like air”

    She will keep breathing
    as she follows her dreams
    that she achieves with flair like
    the birds that fly through the air

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  6. "So we drove on toward death through the cooling twilight."- Fitzgerald

    Fate is set- or at least it seems so
    Moving on silently we
    Passed through backroads as we drove
    Still, we must move on
    With no idea of what we move toward
    The only given being death
    A path all go through
    Ignore it for the
    Feeling of security but the air keeps cooling
    As we sink into the twilight

    Evan Bak

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  7. “I was within and without, simultaneously enchanted and repelled by the inexhaustible variety of life” (Fitzgerald).

    It was I
    who was
    lost. It was I who searched within
    to find myself and
    I did it without
    the help of others. Simultaneously,
    some felt enchanted
    to know what was going on and
    I repelled
    them like flies by
    waving them away in the
    most inexhaustible
    way. Why is there a variety
    of
    people who must know about everything going on in my life?

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  8. “There was a faint, barely perceptible movement of the water as the fresh flow from one end made its way towards the drain at the other” (Fitzgerald/Nick).

    There
    is so much water here. Fact. Was
    there none once and what could a
    writer use for metaphors then? Metaphors scare me as a member of the faint
    of heart, members of which include the barely
    developed sparrow that fell from its bush in 2013, perceptible
    in its cries but not in its movement.
    Of
    course, I supposed the
    pool was important bc water
    is the beginning. As
    he showed us, it can also be the
    end. Fresh
    water from Vernal Falls runs in a flow
    too strong for the daring. Each year, a few fall from
    the top. Don’t be one
    of those people meeting their end
    bc they made
    one stupid idea real. Back to this part of the novel, its
    ending, at least I had thought it was. The way
    Nick is I didn’t think there’d be more when his focus got shot. I reach out towards
    that last line like the
    green light but the effort is a drain...
    At
    The
    Other

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  9. “It was a cold fall day with fire in the room and her cheeks flushed”(Fitzgerald 160).

    Did you hear about it?
    Do you know what it was?
    Rumor has it that a
    summer dream was abandoned in the cold.

    Faster than the leaves fall
    on an autumn day,
    it was over. He was alone with

    his thoughts. Like how a flame becomes fire
    in an instant. Like a scene in
    the movies, when the
    danger lurks in a crowded dark room.

    It trapped him and
    he still only dreamt of her.
    The memory of her rosy cheeks
    drowned, yet remains frozen in time: flushed.

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  10. “So we beat on, boats against the current, borne back ceaselessly into the past”(189).

    Poetry is hard to write. So
    much depends on how we
    articulate our ideas, if we beat
    around the bush, or just go head on.
    We can choose to use metaphors, like comparing a boat
    to a life, and we can go against
    the flow of the
    poem purposefully, to make the reader think about how a current
    drags you this way and that, with a ferocity borne
    by dark sadness. It yanks the boat back
    and forth, ceaselessly,
    taking the boat with it into
    the depths of the
    ocean, forcing the boat out of the present and into the past.

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  11. “Reserving judgements is a matter of infinite hope.”
    F. Scott Fitzgerald

    We sit in our houses, Reserving
    our judgements.

    This is
    Always a
    Challenge, No matter
    How aware we think we are of
    Other people and the infinite
    Problems they face. We must do better than hope.

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  12. “So we drove on toward death through the cooling twilight.” 145

    And then so
    Despite the fears we
    felt, we still drove
    as our minds raced on

    and spun toward
    the fear of inevitable death
    But staring up at the night sky, the fear passed through

    The feeling of the
    Afterglow from the stars and moon was calm and cooling
    And all the worries that were once there melted into the twilight

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  13. I never thought we
    Would be at this place when I went
    Inside and Upstairs.
    Through and through?
    A period
    In bedrooms...
    Some of our brains swathed
    in
    Thorn and some in rose.

    Time and
    Energy of lavender;
    But seemingly silk
    and
    Remotely vivid
    Pictures from far away with--
    Oddly new
    Green Flowers?

    Myself Through
    The green dressings.
    My room
    Through myself and
    Online Poolrooms.

    Habitat closed and
    Sunny bathrooms
    with
    Sun Rays only from dust sunken
    From who-knows-when-Baths.

    Ding dong intruding
    Me into
    Just another one
    Of these meaningless stone chambers...

    I know where
    a
    dishevelled
    man
    Like me needs to be. In
    pajamas?
    No. that was
    My doing.
    Chopped liver?
    NO! My brain exercises
    on
    A tree in the
    Woods. My floor.

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  14. “His count of enchanted objects had diminished by one” (Fitzgerald, 100)

    The day when he could call her His
    Down to that day he would count

    The love he held for her was of
    such a power under which he was enchanted

    He had filled his house with a multitude of objects
    Objects that he thought if he had
    the ties she held to her other life would be diminished

    But this dream had already passed by
    and now he is alone, left as one.

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  15. “It takes two to make an accident.” ― F. Scott Fitzgerald, The Great Gatsby

    She said to me, how was it
    I said he takes
    And then two
    More come out of nowhere to
    Do the same and make
    Me feel like an
    Alien and I realize it wasn't an accident.

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  16. "Most of the time I worked" (61)
    after Fitzgerald

    I've been wondering about what I like to do most,
    What new skill I could aquire, what type of
    trick I shoudl learn. But the
    days go by so fast, I'm asking myself what have I been doing during all of this time
    I am alive, aren't I
    But I still don't do much and it turns out nothing worked

    Zoe Rigoulot

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  17. “But all this part of it seemed remote and unessential” (Fitzgerald 164).

    I tried to forget but
    I still remember it all.

    Mostly I remember this:
    The last part
    The finale of
    The whole of it

    To them it seemed
    Acceptable, for I was remote.
    They didn’t see me as human and
    I too, thought I was unessential.

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  18. "'Life starts all over again when it gets crisp in the fall" (Fitzgerald 118).

    Everything has changed and life
    as we know it starts
    to be a new experience for all.

    It might seem like everything is over,
    but it is time again
    for us to determine when
    we will do something to change it,
    that feeling that gets
    us needing crisp,
    fresh air in

    So now is the
    time where we must not fall.

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  19. "You always have a green light that burns all night at the end of your dock"(Fitzgerald, 99)

    It’s a wonder how I run away with you
    On these burnished days like always
    You gamble with what you already have

    And you always come home with that wine stained “A”
    Scratched onto your face, but you took me to Tavern on the Green
    And I thought I could let you hide from the light
    For a day or two more because of that

    No wonder why it burns
    I remember that Autumn when I had it all
    Figured out and curled up with the night
    And I still left him to wherever his heart was at

    I can’t say I made the
    Right choice to let it end
    If I don’t know the machination of
    Your mind, but there’s no way to know if your
    heart would let the green flicker at the end of the dock.

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  20. Page 161
    Nick reflecting on Gatsby
    Credit: F. Scott Fitzgerald

    “Cabbages are beautiful” said he.
    I was also told “To see a cabbage is a must.”
    “We have
    many cabbages” he said as we looked
    I decided from then that my relationships with cabbages could only go up.
    But when I looked for myself I did not understand what I was looking at.
    It was an
    experience so different from what he had told me it could be described as unfamiliar.
    I thought perhaps that cabbages are ever changing like the sky.
    Perhaps it was a phase it was going through.
    Perhaps the answer is more frightening.
    My dreams of loving cabbages where like leaves.
    They were blindingly green and
    just like leaves shivered.
    However, I learned that as
    I learn about cabbages, I learn that they are different from was said about them from he.
    I knew nothing about them is what I had found.
    I never knew what
    a horrible thing a
    cabbage could be or that it could be grotesque.
    However, I learned a thing.
    We all make assumptions about cabbages like a
    plant that we find pretty such as a rose.
    I wonder what a cabbage really is.

    - Seiyoung Jang

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  21. “There are only the pursued, the pursuing, the busy and the tired.” - F. Scott Fitzgerald (86)

    In a poem there
    are
    the words only
    that the
    poet pursues
    then the
    reader tries pursuing
    an understanding to the
    words. Your mind busy
    across the page and
    working as the
    meaning makes you tired.

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  22. "... rain cooled about half-past three to a damp mist" (90). -Fitzgerald

    stormy weather rain
    breezes cooled
    didn't know what is was about
    but that was only half
    looking to the past
    but it was only three
    no where to go to
    starting at a
    and leaving behind the damp
    there was only mist.

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  23. "My voice seemed unnaturally loud across the garden." (Fitzgerald 46-47)

    I could hear it in my
    Head, a cryptic voice
    That seemed
    So unnaturally
    Real and loud.
    A breeze swept across
    Where I’d been standing, as the
    Shadow crept into the garden.

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  24. "Angry, and half in love with her, and tremendously sorry, I turned away" (Fitzgerald).

    At the end of the night, you left me angry,
    With a plummeting feeling in my stomach and
    A need to cry. If you knew half
    Of what I felt, you wouldn't believe in
    The things you told me. Longing for love
    And feeling lost with
    You by my side. With her
    Advice in my mind and
    Confusion about my life, I debate tremendously
    The direction of my fate. I'm sorry
    I left so abruptly, but I
    Needed to run. That's why I turned
    And slowly walked away.

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  25. “You can’t repeat the past? Why of course you can!” Fitzgerald

    They really haven’t thought about You
    With their feeble minds of course Can’t,
    Their lives are played on Repeat.
    Without knowledge it is typical that The
    Average person will repeat the past.
    It isn’t hard to see why.
    Why would I look up from my plate, Of
    Food that I worked for, to see that your Course
    Isn’t there? I’m focused on my plate. Foolishly thinking I’m not harming You.
    But I can change, we can change. I really believe we can.

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  26. “The touch of a cluster of leaves revolved it slowly, tracing, like the leg of compass, a thin red circle in the water” (Fitzgerald, 173)


    Under the fading crystal skies, so bright yet uneasy, the
    Oxford man traveled through much, yearning to touch
    his glimmer of youth and hope, something of
    much blissful oblivion. However, his plans are a
    waste. It has become nothing but a cluster
    of scorn dreams and efforts. In the end of
    time, like the withered leaves
    that pass by, he wished his life revolved
    around hers earlier. Oh the joy it
    would’ve brought, dancing slowly
    under candle-lit lights, tracing
    her hand under his arm, like
    it was all meant to be. But the
    abandonment she chose, hurt like his leg
    shot in mourn, and of
    all events in his life, this was when a compass
    was needed to steer through a
    detour of strife, an escape through thin
    ice, cold and deadly, but warm like red
    fires engulfing the circle
    of life. By doing so, in
    seconds, he had reached the
    sky and did not look back at his reflection above the water.

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  27. “You may fool me but you can't fool God.” 170

    Look at you,
    You may
    Try to act like a fool
    And try to trick me,
    But
    I know you.
    I can’t
    Try and act a fool
    To God.

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  28. “I’m p-paralyzed with happiness” (Fitzgerald)

    Those dreams of yours that I’m
    Trying to fulfill, but that betrayal made me p-paralyzed.
    Now I am unable to get over with
    The memories that we’ve build with happiness.

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  29. "My own face had now assumed a deep tropical burn." (Fitzgerald)

    I have a family and my
    pet monkey which I own
    but he ate my family's face
    so I had
    to put him down for now
    I assumed
    that a
    lake is deep
    but the tropical
    gingerbread bird was left in the oven to burn



    im not good at poems

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  30. "You can't repeat the past." - Nick (Fitzgerald, 118)

    Time moves around you.
    You can see it. No, you can’t.
    Maybe someday you won’t feel the need to repeat.
    Mistakes are for learning. The
    past has already past*.

    *Read out in the same pronunciation as "passed"

    -Cameron Gurwell

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  31. “I wasn't actually in love, but I felt a sort of tender curiosity.” (Fitzgerald)

    He and I
    What it could’ve become if I wasn’t
    So sad and confused, actually.
    To fall so hard in,
    A confusing spiral of love
    Without a doubt, but
    What is life without the I
    How can we feel like we felt
    Endless turns around a
    Road with no sort
    Of end. The end of
    The road is a tender
    Love, filled with boundless curiosity.

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  32. “ We drove on toward death through the cooling twilight” (Fitzgerald).

    Friendship was We
    As we celebrated the day and Drove
    We drove seemingly on and On
    Until we saw a sign labeled Toward
    We assumed it meant toward home, but little did we know it meant Death
    We drove Through
    Unafraid of The
    Unknown and the Cooling
    Night Twilight

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  33. “personality is an unbroken series of successful gestures” (Fitzgerald 4)

    They tell me of a personality
    That suits a person of stature but I’m not clear on what it is
    A specific demeanor a social behavior an
    Attitude that one must possess to be unbroken
    In a broken society so I agree and commit to a series
    Of blurring confusing events that I can’t identify with it’s something of
    Class they say but do I need it to feel successful?
    But they say the way I feel matters not so my question is are these the right gestures?

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  34. “Can’t repeat the past?…Why of course you can!” (Fitzgerald)

    I think Can’t
    Is word worth not to Repeat
    It reveals, The
    obstacles that we face, in the Past?
    I wonder Why
    Oh why Im thinking Of
    The present of Course
    To believe in you
    To believe in yourself, you can.

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  35. “There are only the pursued, pursuing, the busy, and the tired” (Fitzgerald)

    Those who try never get there
    Maybe those who don't, are
    Only
    The
    Ones who can escape the constant chase of being pursued
    Of pursuing
    The
    Relentless life of the busy
    The life of the tormented and
    The
    Perpetually tired

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  36. "And all the time something within her was crying for a decision"(159). (Fitzgerald)

    She was as restless as a summer storm And
    many wished for her to settle down into a clear blue sky but All
    of her energy could not be tied down and The
    days passed and with Time
    heads began to turn away from her towards Something
    more promising and more submissive and something Within
    panicked. She wanted to be praised and admired. Her
    turmoil was a tornado no one cared to watch. She Was
    slipping into the background as she was Crying
    out for a way to be marveled at For
    just a little longer. She allowed herself to be grounded for A
    Lifetime. And she was ruined by that Decision

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  37. “So I walked away, and left him standing there in the moonlight — watching over nothing” Fitzgerald 156

    Our luck, it must be so
    That you, our friends and I
    Where we together should have walked,
    Must stay away, alive. And

    yet, it is what we have left:
    Protecting him
    Keeping her standing.
    Until we hàve reached there,
    plateaus to safely land in.

    We are in the,
    the moonlight
    Of a sunny hope watching
    Until it’s over
    Let’s be afraid of nothing

    I tried to make it kinda rhyme the first two stanzas, but oh well.

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  38. “It takes two to make an accident””(Fitzgerald 64).


    I can’t stop it,
    But no matter what it takes
    We will always be two
    Never to
    Die and always to make
    The better of it, even though it started as an
    accident.

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  39. A person had a dream. He
    tried to get it through low means. In the ideal world, he did
    just that, not
    caring about how others felt, as if he did not know
    or comprehend such feelings; it was for this that
    his plan did not work; it
    caused his purpose in life to decay, and after a while his daily schedule was
    made of constant rumination; by the time it took a toll on him, he had already
    developed disease, and fell behind
    life, as the damage he had done to others would haunt him

    "He did not know that it was already behind him..." (189)

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  40. “So the whole caravansary had fallen in like a card house…” (Pg. 114)

    She was sitting so,
    Looking at the
    People around the whole
    Place, gathered like in a caravansary
    And she found that things had
    Changed, that the illusion had fallen
    And that she was no longer in
    The hot summer days 5 years ago like
    She had imagined. A
    Tear fell from her eye at the unlucky card
    And she slowly turned away from the grand house.

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  41. "Of course she might have loved him, just for a minute"(162)

    To him, it was unheard of
    That fate may change its course
    And he couldn't believe that she
    Was no longer the girl he met and this might
    Have shown him that she wasn't for him to have
    But, still she's the one he loved
    And that was more than enough for him
    To him it felt just
    Something worth struggling for
    A man who wanted to relive his past for just a
    Minute

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  42. Jona Lehmann

    “Americans, while occasionally willing to be serfs, have always been obstinate about being peasantry.”
    pg. 93, said by Nick (not in dialogue but as narration)


    We the People are Americans
    We have known all the while
    it is vital, occasionally,
    whether reluctant or willing,
    to indulge the imagination, to
    pretend we know what is is to be
    Lord. We are reminded that we are serfs
    When we open our eyes to what we don’t have
    We are grasping, always

    For we have been
    told by our perpetually satiated yet obstinate
    and hungry overlords that we must keep stumbling about,
    for the only thing worse than being
    chained by serfdom is being liberated as peasantry.

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  43. “So I walked away and left him standing there in the moonlight—watching over nothing” (156)

    What good comes at night? So
    Many stars twinkling, I
    Watch with wonder. The Sun walked
    Out of the sky, away
    From the sky and
    From the Moon. It left
    the sky, leaving him,
    the majestic Moon, powerfully standing.

    In the darkness of night there
    Could be shadowy secrets hiding in
    Plain sight, in disguise of the
    Blackness. But I know moonlight
    Is gazing, watching
    The night earth, looking over,
    Ensuring here, danger is nothing.

    -Oliver

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  44. Then there were bloody towels upon the bathroom floor, and women’s voices scolding, and high over the confusion a long broken wail of pain. (Fitzgerald, pg. 37)

    For those who are young, then
    Is not a real time, there
    Is not a real place. For those who are old, memories are all that were
    Left of the ordeal, bloody
    Bodies left scattered over the wastes, towels
    A fond remembrance among the dirt and ash, which laid thick upon
    The skin, clinging to the
    Throat, children painted as men begging for a bathroom
    Because their lives were no longer worth begging for. The young who are now old writhed on that floor,
    And the old who are now dead simply dug in and wept, and
    The dead who are still dead ascended among the angelic tones of women’s
    Song, the hell below muddled up in their beautiful voices.
    The officers kept up their scolding,
    In some feeble hope to mask the same suffering they shared with the men, and
    The men kept up their listening, as to ignore the deafening screaming of shells high
    In the sky, which had long since passed over
    Their heads, but rattled in the
    Men’s skulls as if they had been trapped in a vial with no hole to escape from. confusion
    Was little more than an excuse, as all who were there knew that what had happened was inevitable, a
    Singular occurrence mirroring hundreds of others, coating the land with a long
    Black night, one that could only be broken
    By the bells of victory. But there were no bells. Not for a long while yet. The only sound that remained was the wail
    Of the not-yet-gone, of
    The bodies in the mud whose souls had escaped them, leaving the very simple phenomenon of pain.

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